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Dear principle, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether a mobile phone should be brought to school. Nowadays,more and more people used mobile phone,But it becomes a phenomenonthat students used mobile phone increasingly in the school,It arouse a stir among the public,Wehether studennts should brought a mobile phone to school? Some students think about that it is necessary，Because it can helps student comunicate with their parents when they have something of emergency happend,And now,In some way mobile phone as a tool can help them learn more about knowledge.While others don't think so,They think that students use mobile phone immoderatly should effect their study,In addition,It will increases their economic burdens. As i am concerned,I think students should be prohibited bringing mobile phone to shcool,We should keep the students within a certain old discipline,Building a good envirment in shcool. Yours sincerely, Li Hua
