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my home is not very big .i hope in the future i will buy a further larger house. there are 3 bedrooms ,one kitchen ,one study ,two sittingb room.i reallty enjoy being in each room of my house since wach has its pown wnique characterics and function.if i had to choose,i would say the living room.the biggest feather of the living room is the window.you know it is really relaxing to look at the folf lawn that seems to be endless. it is about 130 square meters.when u enter the room,whe u enrer the room,youe frist glace will be at the vesibule ,after passing through it,u will see the livving room with a huge french window .just the opposite the window,on the other siide of the livving room,is our dining table with 4 chairs.in addotion,we have two bedrrom,s and astudy room to the south of the dinning rooom