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Now days ，there is a more popular phenomenon in china . Most parents help their children to do everything they can in order to reduce their troubles in the future .However what they do are right ？it is really can reduce the problems in children‘s future . my answer is no . Firstly ，if parents always do everything for their children ，it would be cause their children to rely on others . Secondly what is known to all is that the children are the flowers of our hometown .But the most beautiful flowers should be grown in sunshine and rain rather than “warming house” As far as I am concerned .in order to help children to form a independent habit .parents should encourage their children attend all kinds of activities to meet and solve various problems .it is better lead a adventure life . When they grow up they have the ability to challenge matters .
