单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Mary is a American girl.She is a pretty girl who has a round face with a golden hair and blue eyes. She is very good at English.She always help us in English.No matter who have troubles in English she is very warmth to help it. Mary has a sense humor and willing.She always share us everything she have.And let us feel happy. She is very interested in Chinese,but she can not speak Chinese very well.We will help her as she help us in English.