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文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用学术词汇就更好了；作者句法知识很棒，适当增加从句的使用，会取得更不错的成绩；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少。
Less than one percent water is left for the use of people ,animals and plant life.Now although fresh water is becoming scarce , the demand for water is growing because of the increasing number of people in the world. It is important for us to find new ways of saving water or producing it. Some nations have take some measures to provide enough water to satisfy the needs of their people. As for me, I think it is everyone’s duty to save the water can used due to being user .With the development of the country, the demand for water in life is rising quickly .However ,the fresh water is reducing and water plays an important role in our life .But no every body know that saving water is an necessary thing. Some people think the water is too more to out of use. This is because they only know that water covers three-fourths of the earth’s surface instead that less than one percent .So many people use water more than that they should use. Some factory pull the waste water without deal with into the rive . It is increasing the sheep of fresh water reducing . In the face of the problems ,we all should go into action to save and produce the fresh water. We can cycle the water and use water in fit. We also should advocate people save water and educate the youth value the fresh water. If everyone take actions ,the water is satisfy the needs of their people for a long time.
可可英语 - 划词释义
