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As an English monitor,recently I find that some students lose the confidence to learn English language. So I really want to discuss about the topic how to stay the interest of learning English. First let us get learn about the importance about learning English. There are two points. The first one is that today the world is the international world, more and more foregin people want to commnicate with each others whitout any language barriers. English is an universal language. No matter the people from which conutry they should learn English such as Janpanese, Korean and other non-English conutries. The second point is that we can learn the best part of the western culture and then improve ourselves. We can share and understand the different culture. And then let us see how to improve the score and level of English language.There are at least three ways. The first is that we should read more and more articles and English books which have adequate words and vocabularies.The second way is that we should practice oral English among the students. Perodically hold the English corner to discuss the interesting topics.The third way is that let the students be the English teacher to see which part is our weakness and which should be increase more. Anyway above the suggestions is from my opinion. I really hope we can imprve a lot about English in the near future. As long as we do not give up, we can arrive the large the stage.