文中学术词汇使用较少,但单词拼写做的很棒;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Encouragements can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times. It gives you courage and confidence to pass all those hard and gray days, which also makes sorrow and pain fade away. There was a time when I was in trouble that some problems appeared on my studying. Everything about marks became worse and worse, what's more, it caused even more seriously in communication. Some friends of mine broke up with me, smiles wearing on my teachers and my parents' faces faded away. I was so lonely that I even arranged to give up. But there is always someone staying until the last time with you. It was a girl with big eyes and warm heart. She persuaded me to cheer up and lent her notebook to me in order to help me with my poor lessons. To some degree, it moved me. There would never be such a girl later. Now whenever I am aware of difficulties that I think I can't go through, I will always remember the big eyes that belongs to the most beautiful girl in the world. She just like the angle, who leads me to success and happiness.