2013年5月16日雅思大作文真题:广告的副作用

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with the rapid developments of economy,advertising show a significant increase in many countries as far as i am concerned,it benefits the economic growth and society to some extent ,but its negative influence show be noticed. the reason why advertising are varid.first of all , advertisements try to persuade us to purchase different things. so many commodities are provided for pople ,s opinion, that it is fairly difficult for p to be the same with others .accordingly,take clothes as an example . there are various styles,ranging from classic to modern ,childish to mature ,conservation to sexy. theeforce, people still could choose their favoutie style however , this trend is critcised by some p for the following reasons . to start with ,people are losing their individual because they watch the same advertisements and buy the same goods . from my perspective, i completely agree thois viewpoint .