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Jeremy Shu-How Lin was born on 23 August,1988.He is a American who have 191 cm tall and 91 kg.His study grade was very good and he graduation in Harvard university. Because his active mind and training hard.He becomes a first NBA player who graduation in Harvard university after 1954. I think everybody is supposed to hard while they do something.And believe that if we want to do,we can do everything well.