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Jeremy Shu-How Lin was born on 23 August,1988.He is a American who have 191 cm tall and 91 kg.He study hard when he was a student.And finally,he graduated from Harvard university. He not only have a clever mind but also training hard so that he becomes the first NBA player who graduated from Harvard university. I think everybody is supposed to study from Jeremy Shu-How Lin in order to achieve our dreams.I think that if we want to do,we can do everything well.