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zhanjiang is our home and it is our duty to keep the environment clean and tidy.i expecially like the graceful and healthy life , it can make us enjoy our life and study.i think these kinds of things are the essential parts of our life .lwarning it by visiting them seems to be the best choice.in addation,don,t spit everywhere and clean the streets whu u have freee time .more importantly,respect 6the old people and take care of young children and help each other whey they are in trouble and be nice to tem.we used to have old buildings on compus and now we have modern new ones.
