2010年12月英语四级作文真题:让孩子独立

作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用；文章词汇表达多样性不足，不过词汇拼写要再接再厉。

How should parents help children to be independent?This is a hot potatao to most parents. Nowadays,children are given what they want.It is a bad phenonment.Parents often do most of thingd that should be done by children themselves.After a long perio of this cause children can't do even a easy thing.What's more,the rich in quality gives children a ease environment which make them lose the ability to take care of themselves. In order to let childern be independent,parents should try to make a relatively tough surrounding to cultivate children's characters.The most important is try to change the mind of dependent in children's brain.