作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
My favorite sport is football.Now let me tell you how I fall in love with it. When I was a young boy,once,I found a football on my way home by chance,because I was a naughty boy at that time,I played it with my friends.We played happily so that I absolutely forgot the time.And from then on,I began to love football.During the school time,I often played football with my best friend and practice playing.We also won some awards for our school and our teacher always praise us.Of course,we became healthier and we knew that unity is the most important. My favorite football star is Beckham.He is not only cool but also good at football.I hope I can become a professional football player like him in the near future.