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Dec.23rd,2008 Dear Mary Chen, It's time for us to hold a part for happying our new year but i'll go to beijing tomorrow,and i wish you'll told me the result that you have decide on the date which is up to you to decide, and the conditions that how we need to get ready. yours sincecslly li ming