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1. 词数：80~100个。
2. 日记开头已给出，不计入总词数。3. 要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。
作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；作者词汇表达不够多样，希望能多使用学术词汇；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少。
December,seventh.Friday. Today I saw a bad thing let me feel very bad.When I took the bus to home,I saw a old man and his grandson is about ten of age.And the old man brought his grandson's bag and violin.I give my set to this old man but his grandson sat down.So the man just stood near his grandson. After a while,this child want to drunk some water and then he loud cry to the old man.This child threw the empty bottle to the outside of the bus when he finished drinking. I think this child is supposed to honor and take care of his grandpa.And he can't threw the empty bottle to everywhere except the bins.I think he is supposed to keep ther environment clean.
