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It Is Wise to Make Friends Online As we all know, with the development of technology, the Internet has become the part of our life. In the meanwhile, millions of young people have made friends online. In my opinion, I stand firmly on the side that we can benefit from making friends online. On the one hand, we can make friends in different regions who have the same interests with us, because we have more common topics to chat with each other than the other friends in real life. We can know more information about our interests at the same time. On the other hand, we can say something from heart to our online friends. They can help us solve problems in an impersonal way. All we know, people are easier to talk about their puzzles to strangers they have never met. In this way, we can not only release ourselves, but also solve the problems in another perspective. From what have mentioned above, we can come to the conclusion that it is wise to make friends online.
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