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With the rapidly development of our society, My hometown has a greatly changed for those years. When I was a child, there were many kinds of green trees around there. Also, water was very clear in the river, thus, a lot of fishes enjoy their life freely. Although house was a bit small and road was narrow, people still had to work hard in poor conditions to improve their life. Several years has passed, you can't find the original appearance of the little country. Instead, many high building stands everywhere, and also many kinds of car running on the street. Unfortunately, we can't see fishes in river for water became dirty. Urgently, people realized that the living environment isn't suitable for us to live if no measure taken to protect it instantly.