文中词汇表达比较丰富,但学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间;应增加从句和复杂句的使用,注意部分有错误的句子;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Due Attention Should Be Given To the Study of Chinese Recently,the promble of the neglect of the chinese learning has been brought into focus.More and more students are paying less and less attention to the study of Chinese. As far as I am concerned,,there are mumerous factors accounting for the phenomenon mentioned above,but the following might be the critical ones.First and foremost, English leaning are playing a significant role compared with Chinese learning in lots of school.Last but not least,too many students think if they succeed in learning English they can get a good job in the future. Consequently,there are less and less students feel like learning Chinese,thus,no one can deny that the Chinese civilization can not spread away to our descendant. In my opinion, the study of Chinese is indispensible in our country.There is no doubt that our Chinese civilization with beyond 5000 year.As modern college students,it is our responsibility to shoulder the burden of inheriting and developing the study of Chinese.