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Good friend I have good friend!He is a boy.He name is Yi Yangqianxi.He is my classmate. He is very handsome.He has a black short hair.He has big eyes, high nose, small mouth, and the small dimples.He is very love sports, so he is very strong.If you also like him, and beat him on the phone,His telephone number is:22312345678.