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"Whatever happiness or worriedness can't be shared with others by 30% students ."Said by psychology Poctor.Kelly Lam,which caring about how students concerned about sharing."We teach students, so as to let them realize the importance of sharing,but actually we don't make it." The experts said,“It's very important to learn how to share with others in today society,in the meanwhile,it benefits your growth in the future."