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The dragon boat festival is one of important traditional day in china. People uesd to commemorate QuYuan, a famous Patriotic poe. Zongzi is a yummy food and it has a lengency for prevention Quyuan death boby was eaten by fish. With the western festival come to china, more and more young people worship western culture to neglet our own festival. I remember when i was a chirld, my mother and my gradmother get toghther to make zongzi.They pepared food material for zongzi before 1days . The y ready for all things in advance , making zongzi on the dragon boat festival. So our family enjoys ourself and have a good day. The dragon boat festival is not only a day for me , but also it carry a lot of happiness for me.I am sure of peers have similar experience .Let us concern about our traition festival
