单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;从句使用不熟练;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
My hometown I live in a town. It is a beautiful and quite.It is near by the center of the city.It spent about 10 minutes to the center of the city.There is a park in the town.The man of the town like to do morning excises every day.I like the best place where it is the club of Children Palace.I can do more things in there.