作者词汇量积累很好,学术词汇表达灵活;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Nowadays,arts festival is more and more popular at university.It is a wonderful way to enrich college student's life and relaxing their brains after a series of classes.So I am a supporter of advocating this meaningful activity's development.Besides,I think the content of arts festival should be more creative attractive and abandant. What we can do to make arts festival be more colorful?I think it is complicating and difficult,but I can still list some points.First,unquestionablely,culture in the theme of this activity.So it is necessary to offer some special performances about several cultures,including chinese classical culture,model popular culture and western culture.Students call learn more from the difference between native culture and foreign culture. Second,the form and the type of content should not be unique.They should be recreated and enriched.Such as language,music,draw,technology ect,all of them should be contained.As a result of that,arts festival will be more significant. As far as I am concerned,arts festival as a important part of college life should be developed and paid more attentions,which contributes to reach a unforgetable college years.