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Noways,with the growing development of the Internet.People tend to make friends online increasingly. It has become an heated topic whether it is wise to making friends online. Different people hold different opinion towards this issue. Some regards as it is a good idea but others are against it. As far as I concern, making friends online is advisable, which has advantages over than disadvantage. There are several reasons for this .Frist of all, people get more opportunity to get together those who may share common interests and exchange ideas. Secondly,it is both time-saving and money- saving to be with your friends on condition that you get acess to the Internet.You can contact with your friends at any time, Distand no longer is a hinder for commuciation. What's more, your friends may come from every work of life form whom you can learn a lot due to their diversified cultural backgrounds. Last but not last, compared to the communication online makes you feel to exchange your ideas. On the other hand, evvery coin has two sides, we can not ingnore the fact that is also risky for the reason that we may be covinced of others' identify from nowhere which is a potential risk of which should be fully aware. From what has been mentioned above, we can draw the conclusion that making friends online brings us more benefits.
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