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Last week, I have an interview with Kelly Lam,a psychology professor,with the theme of Chinese students' opinion of share their feeling with friends.It is showed that whether happiness or sadness,over 30% of students are not willing to share their emotions. Though educated,we did not make children know the importance of sharing. It was professor Kelly Lam agreed that learning to sharing feelings is essential for children in this century. Last but no the least,it is beneficial for our future improvement to learning how to share feelings.