增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;文中词汇表达丰富度要提升,可是单词拼写错误稍多;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
This weekend I visited Beijing Wildlife Zoo. There are many wild animals there. Many visitors enjoyed themselves. They gave food to monkeys and played with tigers. Animals and people get on well with each other. We should be friendly towards them. It is important to protect environment。 底片cjsd pcjsdvi ojvdsvsd vdvdfvv vvfvsdvdv