很好的运用了从句,同时句法错误极少;文中学术词汇的使用需加强,另外要注意词汇拼写的检查;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
I think it's unwise to get the conclusion as soon as the time you see it or hear it.As many people always believed in there mind that whatever your eyes tell you are undoubtely the turth.But sometimes things have some fake face that may let you make the wrong desicions.For example ,when you heared of someone has come to your room,you'll regard he as the thief while you can't find your personal property.However,he may be get the wrongful treatment.An other case is when you are in the condition of an old woman who was falling down to the ground,you get the publishment because be accused of pushing her by the woman's words ,as the turth was you were kindly to help her .If everybody get the conclusion just from the surface without deeply investigation,you'll fell very gloomly and will certainly don't help others the next time. So,we could get the idea that it's not wise to get the result soonly . We must have a deeply investigation and a serious consideration before make the conclusion,or you'll made a false choice.
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