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Acase in point is a u.s.a people fortuitous adventure in london.that a u.s.a boy no money in life. he is very poor,so he often go to pick the garbage food to be eat.one time , he meet to two rich people and they make a bet. so rich people get a milions of pounds check to he,but a milions of pounds is not cash.as is aften the case a milions of pounds check have not meaned.a month get to,he not only have not hunger or to not arrested,and became is rich people in the life.finally he to be a very rich boy and get to a beatiful grily.the stroy tells us haven't people is very good.because they love money,sarcastic life in london.