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A case in point is a USA people fortuitous adventure in london.That a boy not money in the life. He is very poor,so he often go to pick the garbage food to be eat.One time, he meet to two rich people and they make a bet. So rich people get a mi-lions of pounds check to he,but a mi-lions of pounds is not cash.As is aft-enthe case a mi-lions of pounds check have not mean-ed.To get a month,he not only have not hunger or to not arrested,and became is rich people in the life.Finally he to be a very rich boy and get to a beautiful giry.The stroy tells us haven't people is very good.Because they love money,sarcastic life in london.