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Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will It's said that" There is a will, there is a way." So the will, especially the strong will, is regarded as a good quality. And only if we have a strong will, can we succeed. Do you agree with it? Actually, I agree with it totally. A person who is timid, shy in each situation, extremely tender or even don't have his or her own idea is hard to succeed. And the great missions are always completed by the person who have a strong will. Because the successful way is filled with difficult or even despairs, we have to face those challenges and deal they. And always we have handle those problems by ourselves. Studying is same too. If we are lazy or don't work hard, we will not be a useful man in the future and Edison said: "Genius is 1 percent inspiration plus 99 percent of sweat." So, let's get move, we'll succeed!