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It is NanJing that I want to advise you to visit most.As a economically developed city having a long history,NanJing not only owns advanced economic but also has great Chinese literature. Since,NanJing has exsited for centuries,there are many hestations left from our anctors which represent our elder civilization,such as Sun Yat-sen Mausolem,Tombof emperor ZhuYuanzhang and XuanWu Lake.All of the over places are truly worth your visit and I'm sure you will enjoy youself so much as to forget to leave there.Meanwhile,being one of several well developed cities in China,NanJing also consists of large shopping malls,beatiful public gardens and various entertainment venues.In addition,serving as the captital of JiangSu Province,a large educational province,it is full of many famous high schools and universities,including NanJing University,Hohai University and NanJing University of Technology. In short,I'm waiting for you.NanJing is waiting for you.
