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I have a good friend,his family name is He ,his english name is Apple, we recognized for ten years .we recognized him at the my first company. we have a same favourit, such as play balls and read books at the weekend . we often play basketball, and we often go to library for read books . we can help each other while we meet problem. I hope we can keep relationship .