单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
My friend is a beautiful girl,her name is Lucy.She is my classmate.In my experience,she is so tall and very thin.She has two big eyes and long hair.She likes wear a colourful clothes,Sometime we ride a bike go to school together, and reading book,listening music.she is like Janpanese foods,we often eat together,we are good friends.