单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;可适当增加从句的使用;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
My friend is a beautiful girl,her name is Lucy.She is my classmate.In my experience,she is so tall and very thin.She has two big eyes and long hair.She likes wearing a colourful clothes.Sometime we ride a bike go to school together, and reading book,listening to music.She is like Janpanese foods,we often eat together,we are good friends.