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My new teacher is a boy,came from Canada.Teach us history course.He was graduated of history at the American Unversity.When he came the classroom,we very like him,he is a handsome boy,wearing the white shirt and black trousers. His class is very humorous and profound knowledge.He ofthen take us going to the museums what is the ancient buildings. He said nothing is impossble if you keep going.The dream wll come true.