2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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in china when somebady come your hometown,you should take them go to beautful place.my hometown is very beatuful place.there are have many animals and many fallowars.l love my hometown just love my live.if you come my hometown ,l will take you go to my hometown river.it is very beatiful and cute .than l will tack you go to changchen.it is largest