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Since mental decide behavior,we can not disregard our mental health.Is important to imporve our mental health,especially students.Without a healthy mental,students will not deal with sorrow ang happiness correctly. For students,school is their mainly life spot.Any achievement or failure about study affect students' chycolog.School should offer lectures about healthy mental to student so that students are able to attain informations about mental.Otherwise,more interesting curriculums should be involved by students.Interesting classes can do positive influence to students'health mentally. To students thensselves,not to cling anything too much and learn to put down.Students should keep in touch with classmates.Most essentially,students should keep delighted everyday.