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My name is Lihua,your pen pal. I came from yangjiang city china.Do you know china history? Chinese people have very much unique traditional festivals.Such as,The mid autumn festival,that day is very important in the china,because everyone can miss his father and mother.The mid autumn festival, chinese people and themselves family are going to eat food in the home. They can see the moon and eat the moon care.This is very beautiful scenery.