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In a harmonious society,p should hep each other each other when theu need.such as when u see the blind and old people cross the roads .we should imaginative to come up with many good ideas .we should generous and acticity join in all kinds of cgarity activities .last year ,i donated the money to the activities .i hope i will help much more people in need