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As we all know,what you see and hear may be not the truth,if you think all of the things together,you will get a different result.Making a quick conclusion may lead to a bad consequence.When you want to make a decision,you should think it carefully. We can not consider that what we see and hear must be the truth.If someone let you see and hear something deliberately and you really believe them,then you will make a mistake and you may hurt somebody that is kind for you.When we decide to do something,we shuold have better to communicate with other people and ask them to give some advice. Remenber that when making a decision,you should think again and again to make sure that your decision is correct and you will never regret of it.
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