拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
Everyone has different ways to deal with things for kinds of sides. We can discuss this phenomenon from these points. First of all, it is about the whole. To put all eggs together is easy to protect all of them.We can avoid some bad things to happen.When it occurs, we can take them to secure places quickly, not one by one. There are some people with other opinions. They think it is dangerous. All eggs are in one basket, if the basket falls on the earth, you may lose all of them.It is weak to avoid danger. Although it spends much time to protect them, but it is worth. In my view, it is not smart to keep all eggs in one basket.