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As you know, taking care of aged people become an prominent social problem.With the necessary, the home robots are published. And the main features are as following: Firstly, the home robot like a cooker, can make dinner in appointed time. Besides, the time can be set as you like. Moreover,the home robot like a friend, can talk with erder man or do excesises together. At last, it can deal with emergencies promptly. For example,it can call when the aged man is sick. This new product is suitable and powerful and must be popular in the furture.
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