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【题目要求】
In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.【题目分析】
注意审题。是teenager而不是college students。Teenagers have jobs，这显然是一个BAD idea。Teenager，意指十几岁的孩子——16岁或者18岁以下(18岁以上就是adult了，16、7的孩子往往被称之为 young adults。参见：[61])。雇用童工(Employing children labor)目前在很多国家是非法(illegal)的。也违反国际儿童保护条约(International Children Act )。允许雇用童工，或存在童工现象，都是一个国家落后愚昧的表现。不要说teenager打工可以锻炼自我，teenager需要的是接受教育，健康成长；不要说teenager打工可以认识社会，teenager还不具备足够的心理承受能力(psychological endurance)，过早步入社会 (early exposure to the real world)，只能导致世界观、价值观(out look of world, value, etc.)的扭曲(deteriorated; distorted)。采用了恰当的衔接手法，层次清晰；作者句法知识扎实，但从句稍微偏少；文中学术词汇使用较丰富，词汇量积累仍然需要；请注意分段；可以适当增加副词的使用；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Because all the experenced journalists have been distributed to the stricken areas,no one is available to have a interview with the Prime Minister. So it is important for you to find some person responsible for this event which ia related the well-being of our country and the people all over the world.
