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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.【题目分析】
注意审题。是teenager而不是college students。Teenagers have jobs，这显然是一个BAD idea。Teenager，意指十几岁的孩子——16岁或者18岁以下(18岁以上就是adult了，16、7的孩子往往被称之为 young adults。参见：[61])。雇用童工(Employing children labor)目前在很多国家是非法(illegal)的。也违反国际儿童保护条约(International Children Act )。允许雇用童工，或存在童工现象，都是一个国家落后愚昧的表现。不要说teenager打工可以锻炼自我，teenager需要的是接受教育，健康成长；不要说teenager打工可以认识社会，teenager还不具备足够的心理承受能力(psychological endurance)，过早步入社会 (early exposure to the real world)，只能导致世界观、价值观(out look of world, value, etc.)的扭曲(deteriorated; distorted)。文中用词稍显贫乏；作者句法知识扎实，但从句稍微偏少；文章结构不错，使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词；请注意分段；可以适当增加副词的使用；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
Because all the experienced journalists have been sent to the stricken areas,no one is available to have an interview with the Prime Minister. So it is important for you to find some person responsible for this event which ia related the well-being of our country and the people all over the world.
