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in modern society ,i would like to help people when they are in trouble.it is an indispensable part in our lives . it makes me happy to help blind people or some people who have something wrong with his body .i run into a blind people last year and he can,t cross the street on u way .i carrying his arm to amny place of interests .he thanked me at the end .
