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【题目要求】
In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.【题目分析】
注意审题。是teenager而不是college students。Teenagers have jobs，这显然是一个BAD idea。Teenager，意指十几岁的孩子——16岁或者18岁以下(18岁以上就是adult了，16、7的孩子往往被称之为 young adults。参见：[61])。雇用童工(Employing children labor)目前在很多国家是非法(illegal)的。也违反国际儿童保护条约(International Children Act )。允许雇用童工，或存在童工现象，都是一个国家落后愚昧的表现。不要说teenager打工可以锻炼自我，teenager需要的是接受教育，健康成长；不要说teenager打工可以认识社会，teenager还不具备足够的心理承受能力(psychological endurance)，过早步入社会 (early exposure to the real world)，只能导致世界观、价值观(out look of world, value, etc.)的扭曲(deteriorated; distorted)。文中用词稍显贫乏；作者句法知识很棒，适当增加从句的使用，会取得更不错的成绩；衔接成分太少，文章结构欠佳；请注意分段；连词使用偏少。
Recently, whether or not the teenage should have a job has arouse a wide concern.From teenage's opinion, having a job is a good way to reflect their abilities dealing with problems in the life. However,there is a doubt whether they really have abilities to confront and overcome the pressure of job.In my view,teenagers should not have jobs.
