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When sad life, your friend whether encourage you to go out sad life. Lt' likely that encourage of us are very important in the future,because us haven't it.As is often the case us often to meet sad thing with the friend and we must be encourage to with the friend said sorry for you.We were encouraged goes to do many thing,such as, the first play basketball or the first go to swimming in the pool.L believe the title statement is valid,because encourage is very good in the life.