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There are an upsurge about certificate.As known to us all,It's no doubt that certificate is important.So we can see many people are busy in getting a kinds of certificates there and here. Why do people so crazy about getting the certificate?There are some reasons.The obvious one is that it is helpful for us to acquire a job.In the 21 century,Certificate play an important role in competing for getting a job.However,some people try their best to get certificate just for making them feel more satisfied,they always lack confidence unfortunately.Differents form what is said above, the reason why a few people are crazy about certificate is that they want to be better.So they study hard and never to stop,One by-product of it is that they get possess more and more certificates. In my opinion,we should not study just for certificate but for study.There are too many false certificates,so you have no choice but to study.