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A beautiful city in China My hometown is GuanZhou ,in my opinion ,GuanZhou is a very beautify city in China. GuanZhou is a city where you can appreciate both the ancient culture and modern city lifestyle .There is endemic traditional house and modern glass-wrapped building .GuanZhou is known as her delicious food ,in which you can enjoy any food from anywhere .As for me ,I prefer the local food and I strongly suggest you to experience the "Morning Tea "culture in GuanZhou .What's more ,the cured meat and soup is also worth trying . In a word ,GuanZhou is a city where combine with traditional and modern lifestyle ,and you will absolutly have a good time in here .