2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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My hometown located ZunYi, GuiZhou. My hometown has dream prosperous,so that it is protected and liked.When i know that my friend of a foreign want to my hometown,i was glad to, meanwhile, i wish to more pople know it,as well as. I plan to three steps,as follow:first ,we will go plant park of so-called nation in order to increase our knowlge.Second,we go to animels zoom of plant and water pull.Third,we will be seeing old towns,my hometown has many histories dress. Dear friend liked my plan,isn't it?you can refer to my suggests.